First We Kill The Editors

The House on Lynch Street by Adshan Jaffery has an engaging cover with these words: “You can leave the house; you cannot leave the game.” Those words are the best part of this novella or short story. The rest of the story, one with a very interesting premise, is full of typographical and egregious grammar errors. If an editor was paid to look at this, the author should request a refund. Because it is a short novella, I read to the end to see if there was any change or improvement. There wasn’t. From beginning to end, this was an editing nightmare.

I went to the Amazon author page to see if there were other novels written by this author. The Killing Scripture is 331 pages and sells for USD 2.99 with no Kindle Unlimited option. I have this perverse urge to read the longer novel and see if the editing of The Killing Scripture is as bad as The House on Lynch Street. I have successfully resisted that urge. I read this short novella with Kindle Unlimited, so the only thing wasted was my time. I am submitting this review with a one-star Amazon rating, the lowest I can give, as a word of caution to others who might be tempted to read the longer, more expensive work.

Read this first.

Here are a few samples of what offended me:

“When she vanished without leaving a clue, he talked to his neighbor Mr. Hudson about what makes a woman does it.” (Kindle Locations 34-35).

“he had one of his monthly dinner planned” (Kindle location 40).

“The Sullivan, Steve and Lisa – husband wife, were the friendliest couple in town.” (Kindle Location 62).

“Though they were living in the same area since a decade,” (Kindle Location 66).

“Lisa Sullivan, busy serving dinner to the guests, was wrapped in an elegant, knee-length salmon dress which was swiping the floor beside her everywhere she goes. Her hairs were crowned with pearls giving her an appearance of a goddess. Tom felt that she liked to play with her dress and hairs more often than others.” (Kindle Locations 73-75).

My Note: I can not form an image of how a knee-length dress swipes the floor unless she is “walking” on her knees. The use of “hairs” is strange. Did Tom feel that other people liked playing with her dress and hairs?

“Every time he saw me, he starts running as if he was a spy.” (Kindle Locations 88-89).

“It is easy for me to get a permit for conducting experiments out of the city than in the middle of a residential area full of innocent people.” (Kindle Locations 105-106)

At this point, I did not give up reading. I did not give up highlighting errors. Up to the above note, I was only at 21% of the novella. I leave it to readers of this review to imagine how long the review would be if I reported every error.

This novella is a waste of time.

3 comments

  1. Wow! I applaud you for finishing it. The examples you gave had me screaming “take a basic 8th grade English class please!” I have a headache forming just thinking about the ‘novel’. Keep resisting that urge to read it my friend. Thanks for sharing with honesty!
    P.S. I thought ‘Fifty Shades of Grey’ was bad (I couldn’t stomach finishing it; my kid -12 at the time I tried reading that so-called book- could have done a better job.

    1. About the basic English class, I was surprised. According to the Amazon author page, the writer had graduated from a big name journalism school.
      About “50 shades of Grey,” I never read it but tried listening to it on Audible because I had students who claimed to have read it. I remain convinced they either did not read it or they focused on specific parts. I couldn’t even finish listening to more than a quarter of the novel.

      1. Wow. I’m in shock about the journalism school. Maybe they attended Trump University?! 😉
        Oh….listening to ‘Fifty Shades’ on audio would have been absolute torture.

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